"it's nice to meet you, and it's all right, my mother act's a lot like him so I'm used to it, bleach the suit jacket, and shirt, you'll have to burn the tie though" she said "that way it has the same feel as it does but it's not as outrageous with the colors"

(Umm.. Re read my previous post? xD)

(D< Malia has ADD sometimes okay?)

(Oh alright, I'm just trying to figure out your character and writing style is all..)

"Right..." Rasp said with an intrigued look. "It's amazing to have met a girl that made Jeddy walk off like that." She said smoothing her fingers around the wine glass. "I wish I can find a man like him. Aaah. I dunno why but this reminds me of the time when I was younger. I always act out a wedding and Jeddy was always the groom." Rasp began to be lost in thought.

"Uhh.. She's going to be out for a couple of minutes not.. Happens often, don't bother waking her though she becomes very happy, and feels freshened when she comes back to." Bastion said.

(I'm going to try and leave the wedding soon. And move back to the next school day, just leaving a heads up if you want to introduce any new characters.)

Malia nodded "okay," she said softly

(no not really, I'll introduce her mother later)

Soon a old lady walks towards the table, its obvious she had plastic surgery. She looked 40 but you could tell she was older.
"Hmph? Who's this? And also WHERES MY CHAIR BOY!?" The lady said.
"Eh, oh! RIGHT AWAY NANA!" Bastion said as he quickly took a stand and pulls out Nana's chair. Nana sits down and waits impatiently.
"AHEM!" Nana said as loud as possible. Soon rushing waiters run towards her bringing her some pastries and pouring some tea. "So.. Who's this here?" Nana said without hesitation, being real straight forward.

Malia looked up slowly "I'm Malia, Bastian's girlfriend" she said a small smile on her face

"I didn't ask for a title you twit." Nana said. She then sighs. "What is there to do with you boy... Perhaps I should send you to a private school in Norway?" She begins sipping tea ignoring everyone.

"MA.LI.A..... Be nice to Nana.* Bastion whispered sweating like crazy.

Malia simply looked down and kept quiet tapping her fingers on her legs like she was playing the piano

After an extremely cold wait with Nana, Jeddy comes walking back in a black suit and tie.

"Whats with this black? I'm not dead yet you imbeciles." Nana said intensely.

"Excuse myself Mother." Jeddy said with up most politeness. "This is only a back up I left for myself, my other suit got WET." Jeddy stares Bastion down, Bastion ignores not threatened by his fathers words.

"Eh whatever, I don't give a crud. Now what is it that you want? Just say it already so I can curse you and send you away." There was a silent pause.

"The doctor says she could make it, its just the matter of..."

"I don't want to hear it!" Nana yelled. "She won't make it no matter how much money it takes, I rather throw a funeral. I was proud until you came along. And I rather see that she leaves with some dignity I left her." It was quite but intense.

"So nothing I can say can change that?"

"Nothing you say can change the fact that your son there will be sent away soon by me. I found a perfect dorm for him and everything, you won't be able to take care of him without me to begin with. So lets leave it at this, Bastion I have gratitude that you brought this girl. AND GIRL. I take gratitude in you for staying still during all of this." Nana left.

"Come, lets go..." Bastion said sadly and quietly. It was dark out, probably going on 10. It was late. "Want me to walk you home?"

Malia stayed silent nodding her head slightly "please Bastian, I don't think I'll make it all the way home with all the talk of dying" she said softly her hand going up to her locket, the only thing she refused to take off when being forced into the dress

After half way through the walk Bastion said smiling.
"I'm surprised you didn't realized that I knew where you lived." He said smiling, laughing. "Trust me that's not all I know, I also know your bra size, and pantie size."

Malia then smirked "then what size are they?" she asked raising an eyebrow as she walked with him "and almost everyone know's where I live, well my friends at least" she said

Bastion raises a piece of paper. "Clair wrote them down for me." He said wiggling it in Malia's face. "But I have to say, if you were a little depressed then. You'd be dead if you've ever could see what could of happened if you weren't there. Nana was being extremely nice then, so if I was you I'd get happy fast because I'm thrilled!"

"hey! give them back those are personal!" she cried out trying to grab the paper "and if you want me depressed I can be depressed" she said angrily clutching her locket tighter in her fist before walking off at a brisk pace trying to hide the tears forming in her eyes from him

Bastion shows the paper, it had nothing written on it. "I was just joking, the only perverted thing I know is where you live." He said. After a few short blocks he stopped at the end of Malia's street. "I'm stopping here, enjoy your night." He said walking off without consent from Malia.

(Time skip to next day or what?)

"Bastian? thanks I had a nice time" she said softly to him before walking home letting herself in she locked herself in her room and cried herself to sleep her father having died a few years ago.

(sure, you start)

(Well.. I'm kinda waiting on plot from you. You have somewhat plot from me, it's time to get to know Malia and her "other" selves. So you start off xD.)

Malia sighed looking through her closet picking who she wanted to be for the day, her personalities came into person when her father died, replacing the void was her different people "mom, where's my black beret?" she called out
"On your shelf!" her mother called back walking in "how many people must you have? just be you, that's what he would have wanted" she said leaning on the door frame dressed in a orange oriental patterned robe
"but mom, this is how I cope" she said softly putting on her wig and jersey "beside's I'll tell the rest of them around the end of the season"
"do you promise Malia Jean?" She asked her orange hair flying every which way
"yes mother. I'll see you later" she said softly walking out of the house

(I'm going to kill you here... Write more? xDDD I want to see paragraphs xD.)

(happy?)

(I have nothing to work with.. xD sorry)

Malia sighed as she got to school seeing Bastian she walked over to him "If you even think about giving up my secret I will kill you myself" she hissed before walking off pushing nerds, and flirting with some of the girls to get them to leave her alone, just like her jock personality always did. Walking off to the courtyard to relax and wait for Bastian to come find her, something that she wanted him to do.
(how's that?)

(Much better in comparison to the last thing you wrote xD. Your still squishing but not at a huge extent. The only thing I want to point out is when you said "Like her jock personality" Don't be saying like this personality, because the person reading doesn't know what this personality is because you haven't introduce it yet. So in short don't mention something that hasn't been introduce yet unless it serves for plot later.)

Across the field a young boy wearing a middle school uniform is staring at Malia through Binoculars. Amongst him was a taller, extremely skinny kid wearing glasses.
"Woah, woah woah. She's new, how many hot girls are coming to this school anyway?" The smaller boy said. "Man when I finish school, I'm going there!"
"HEY HEY! NO FAIR! LET ME LOOK!" The taller boy said snatching the binoculars from the smaller boy. "WOAH! Man! I wonder what color are her panties!"
"You idiot! Girls like her don't wear any!"
"Whaat!? No way!"
"So true! They are born hookers!"
"Hey what are you two doing!?" A women said, she was dressed with a long black skirt, and white riffled top. She had short red hair that goes down to her neck, and wore thin black glasses.
"Crap it's Ms. Heartveil!" The boys said at the same time.
"Jimmy, Timothy.. IS THAT YOU? WHY ARE YOU HEADING TO CLASS?" Ms. Heartveil then grabs the boys by the ears and then walks off dragging the boys. "You two aren't missing class again to be looking at Niamoria High School girls again?"
"WERE SORRY!" Both boys said at the time.

(Haha.. I just wrote you some admirers xDD )

Malia sighed she had changed back into her real self, no personalities no other people to be, just plain old her. She sighed and curled up at the far end of the bleachers reading, lost in her own world as she read of Far off places, daring sword fights, magic spells, and a prince in disguise. Looking up she sighed "sometimes i wish things were like my books always a happy ending" she muttered before seeing the cheerleaders practicing

"Jennie! no it's left right left right center jump!" Maryanne yelled at the freshmen
"Sorry Maryanne, I'm trying!" she said trying to do it perfectly "I can't do this!"
"yes you can, follow my lead"
"okay Maryanne" she said following the captain
"common! this needs to be perfect for homecoming next week!"

(bonus points if you guess what disney film the book description is part if)

(I was sorta thinking Hallows Moving Castle for some reason, but that's not Disney. And.. Oh yeah.. You squished stuff again, when did she changed? xDDD)

(well she was her jock dressed in the wig and everything but then you had the middle schoolers see she was a girl! and yes it is, Beauty and the Beast, when she's in the bookstore in the beginning)

(Oh wait you were dressed as a guy? xDDD Maybe you need to clarify what kind of person the personality is, I remember hearing Beret so I thought it was a girl... And OK you added characters which you just edit in and I failed to see xD... I will admit that edit made me laugh a bit. ITS RIGHT LEFT RIGHT LEFT CENTER JUMP DAMMIT D<

Oh and P.S. You won't be seeing Bastion today, so you better be finding something else to do >DDD)

(fiine, just post please)

(Nope all up to you this time >D, Bastion isn't around today. So you need to develop a storyline. Your the main character after all, and I don't mean character storyline. Maybe I should leave you something to work with.)

"Umm excuse me? Your Malia right?" A girl said, she was one of the girls working in Clair's dress shop. "Madam Clair wanted me to give you this letter." The girl hands it over and walked off without a word. The letter wrote,

"Malia, I will be gone for a few days! So I'm writing down some chores for you to do in the meantime...
1. Pick up a outfit at Clair's.
2. Clean up my room! I live at 109 Cherryway.
3. Take Blacky to the park!
4. Make friends!

I hope everything turns out great when I get back!"

Malia nodded "yes" she said to the girl, before taking the letter and reading it, she sighed "idiot" she muttered "I am not cleaning his room, I am not a maid. blacky?" she muttered confused she was about to ask the girl before realizing she was already gone "I hope it's not another dress, if it is I'm picking the goddamn color" she muttered getting up.

At the end of the school day she walked off to the dress shop "Clair?" she called out walking in "Bastian said I had to pick up an outfit" she said looking for the woman braced for being whisked into the backroom again

Suddenly the girls marched towards Malia, wearing camo versions of their work outfits.
"HUT HUT HUT HUT HUT." The girls said aloud grabbing Malia and dragging her into the back dressing room.
"AATTTTTENTION LADIES!" A grouchy crude voice is heard, it was definitely Clair to some extent. She walks in dressed in a stylish Sargent suit. "WE HAVE ORDERS FROM BASTION TO TAKE THIS GIRL IN AND DRESS HER INTO MY FAMOUS MAID LE ZEL OUTFIT! ARE MY ORDERS CLEAR!?"
"YES MAM, YES!" The girls yelled out loudly.
"GOOD! NOW I WANT TO SEE THIS GIRL IN THE OUTFIT STAT!"
"YES MAN, YES!"
The girls began tearing off Malia's clothes changing her into a maid outfit.

"no no and no!" Malia yelled struggling "I should have came here last!" she cried out keeping her jeans in one piece and on "you remove the pants and there is going to be a lot of black eyes!" she cried out struggling to get out of the shop "it is not practical to wear a maids outfit outside! I am not a maid and never will be!"

"WE WILL FIGHT FOR OUR COUNTRY!!!" The girls cried out taking off the jeans and completing their task in succession. "MISSION ACCOMPLISHED MAM!" They yelled, as they lined up saluting to Clair who begins walking up and down the their line.

"Very good girls! You made your country proud!" Clair yelled out then stared at Malia. "Now I want this foreigner OUT OUT OUT!"

"YES MAM, YES!" The girls marched Malia out pushing her out of the store.

Malia glared at the girls as she was pushed out flipping any of her schoolmates that laughed seeing her, she marched off glad she still had her sneakers on. "now what next?" she muttered "beside's changing back into jeans...." she added stalking off to his house, ringing the bell she sighed hoping his father didn't answer the door
(I'm guessing you want him to see her like that >>)

(Indeed, your really getting into my head. Sadly my characters are unpredictable.)

"I'M COOOOMMIIIIINNGG!!" A manly voice was heard." The door opened with Jeddy twirling around in circles. "Aaah you must be that Maid Bastion mentioned! COME RIIIIGHT IIIIINNN!" Jeddy said still twirling around not recognizing Malia at all. "Here's my sons room!!! My aren't you pretty! Oooh just wait until Bastion hears that a pretty girl was in his room!" Jeddy twirls off.

Bastion's room was extremely trashed. Clothes everywhere in the room, books stacked to who knows where. Underwear on the small flat screen TV. Pizza boxes stuffed under his bed, with vicious eyeballs underneath staring at Malia. And worst of it all, it smelled so bad it's amazing he smells so clean after school.

(P.S. Don't bother trying to correct Jeddy, I want it to be a running theme that he is clueless when you look different. Oh and, prepare for a even bigger surprise after the room xD)

Malia coughed smelling the room she started to clean as she pictured his slow death, starting with different torture techniques, "he might not live to see another day" she muttered as she cleaned she kept her eyes open for any pictures or camera's hoping to get rid of the black mail evidence if she could find it, finishing his room she sighed "take Blacky to the park?" she muttered confused

Jeddy still twirling around comes into the room. He then stops to look at the job well done. "Oooh job well done.. HEH!?" Jeddy looks around. "Oh wait.. THIS IS MY ROOM! Oh I'm so sorry! But heyy you did a good job! No Bastions room is across from mine!" He walks out the room opening the door to Bastions real room. It was extremely clean and well kept. It didn't look like a mess at all and their was a letter on the desk reading,
"Malia! I want to see this room shine even brighter then it does now! - Bastion"

Malia sighed and smirked "now this is going to be fun" she muttered cleaning it, making the room almost sparkle with how clean she made it. "now would had have hidden the pictures or not?" she asked herself looking around before sighing "he's not that stupid" she told herself.

Jeddy walked into the room. "OH MY THIS IS EVEN SHINIER THEN DIAMONDS!!!" He said beginning to twirl again.

(Now you can ask about blacky >D)