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I wrote this for a high school poem assignment for an english class. Interpret it as you will.

As the Crimson Sun
Sets behind the Horizon
Darkness will prevail

You would not believe the reactions I got from this from different classmates.

I can definately see an image of encroaching evil if one takes the metaphorical approach. As a straight literal image though it's kinda neat, as long as one doesn't assume darkness is evil. The crimson sun could also reference the old salior's saying, "red sky at night" etc boding good seas.

Yeah, I meant for it to be a literal sunset, but everyone thought I was suicidal and/or predicting the apocalypse or something. It was rather dumb. Haha.

Suicidal sounds a bit heavy but that doens't surprise me. Crimson can be related to blood, and moons are melancholy sorrowfull things that bring around wolves and vampires and mysterious night things that are evil, and then darkness comes and it's the end of the world because darkness is evil and it prevails, therefore the sun is gone forever and swarms of bats will fill the air when the stars fall leading more darkness and more evil, ahhhh!

Okay I'll stop now. ;). But yeah, that manner of interpretation is something that I cna see given the metaphors people generally apply to red moons, darkness, and sunsets. I leaned that way a little myself until I remided myself that there really wasn't any evidence of that in the poem beyond potential metaphor.

Does it have a title?

crimson sun also is a loose reference to japans flag(maybe more of the war flag) whether it was intentional or not it fits in great with the haiku :P

The war flag is the one with the rays coming out from the red circle. I think it's referred to as the Rising Sun flag as well.

Oh geez. I said "moon" by accident in my last post. Just realized.

yeah its the rising sun, but the crimson sun is what they call the sun on it ><

Really? Didn't know that.

I never thought about it that way, Ashy. Huh. C: That is kinda neat.

But no, it doesn't have a title. I had to write a haiku as one of many different forms of poetry for our "poetry project", as it were. I literally didn't know what to Haiku about, so I looked out the window to nature for some inspiration, and I guess the sunset performed as a muse for me. So I wrote about it. It took virtually 3 minutes to figure out the rhyming and words I wanted for it.

I am a bit of a creative writer, but sometimes I don't even know half the stuff I spout out. Haha.

Heh. I've done the same thing actually, only I happened to glace out the window while I was working on another poem and happened upon a moth perched against the glass and wrote haiku about it.

There are special rules about writing haiku but I never remember all of them, though things like seasonal words are used and as far as I know, nature is a routine and fully acceptable topic.

I find haiku wonderful to write on the spur of the moment. I'm currently fighting with another poem that I've been working on for the past few days. Not a very moving experience so far at all.

My instant reaction was... Well, poetic description of sun set, and mentioning the very natural night that will follow. Well, maybe with storm, considering the color, but yea.

But I can see why apocalyptic and suicidal can be sensed there. xD

this reminds me of the that sudden change in atmosphere where things go from a really good sunny day to a very fast sudden appearance of danger

I can kind of see it meaning that when the sun sets, and you're alone, your true colours shine.
Almost as if being alone is a torturous thing, and when the sun goes down, and your friends have left, so has the facade you hide behind.
Leaving you to drown in your own pool of emptiness and misery.

That sounds rather artsy in itself there, Muse.


Have you considered putting anything else up, Saith? I like looking at poetry (especially stuff that's short ;)). I'm a little skittish when it comes to putting some of my own up though.

I was humoring it, yes. But I don't have any other work to show. I did recently apply to be a writer here on Tris. We shall see how that goes.

Ah. Okay. Let us know how you do :).