It's surprisingly easy to miss stuff in your own work. I've proofread a piece four times and still found an error in it when I printed it out to read again. I think it comes from having written the piece, when reading it over the writer may read more from their memory of what they wrote rather than directly from the page, which a new reader would have to do, and therefore miss some of the mini-mistakes like that.
I usually proof read but since it is my own writings I'm familiar with the content causing me to do something similar to speed reading and skip over smaller words. XD
I have this poem that I don't own. The girl that does gave me permission to post it. She wrote it for our creative writing class. We were supposed to write a poem and later a horror story using a /darker/ translation of our writing partner. I was hers so the poem is about me! In a very twisted way~ <3
Illusions
Lies are chains
the bind the soul to this place,
Dark crevices and shadows lurk
behind every corner and your back never turns.
Your guard is up and suspicion rests in you eyes
what is Trust?
The word,
It is foreign to you,
You can’t possibly understand it.
HATRED
PAIN
DEATH
DESTRUCTION
It is your chant
Peace is impossible to you
and our storms to you a simply a light rain
you can’t bring yourself to care
For those who abandoned you.
Left you by the side
So you take the knife that you think we don’t see,
Every single night,
and let your own blood flow
the moon and stars your only witness
To the beautiful, torn, and tattered soul of yours.
Written by,
-Kara (My writing partner)
I'll get my poem for her and our story up later.
Puppy to Asami
Gallagher is Nursy~
Broken Muse is my girlfriend
And Ducky is awesome!
Quote:
That is the general nature of things! An equality, a mutal need!
What? To kill and be killed? To love and to feed? That is what you support! There is no equality between the pet and the master.
-Elizabeth & Jason (From The Thirteenth Season)
And now my poem for her character. She was an interesting one and making her /darker/ was easy and way too much fun. And it is supposed to be from her character's view, just to clear up any confusion.
Coeur Noir (French for Black Heart)
Let me give you a heart,
Just to break it,
Let me teach you love,
Simply so you can feel hate,
I want you to burn in hell,
Only if I put you there~
The gun you pointed at my chest-
Let me tell you a secret-
It is not a threat.
I have no heart,
So I'm told,
Just a void to eat you soul.
I can't help but think,
The screams are music to my ears,
But your screams,
Oh-those,
Those are heavenly...
I love blood,
So sweet and metalic and what a pretty color~
But your blood is a delacy,
And I must be careful not to spill to much.
I want to bend you,
And break you,
And make you my pet,
No one else can have you,
No one else can see you,
You are mine!
And mine alone...
Story in progress, not yet ready for posting.
Okay it is now sorta (not really) reading for a bit of posting. And truth betold, we weren't actually going to write a gory romance. But my poem sealed the poor story's fate so without much ado I give you~
Krof Verführung (Blood Seduction-German)
All I can think about is you, my lovely little bird~ Viktoria stared impassively at the note in her locker, notice only slight differences from the before. She knew she should take it to the lab for her coworkers to study but she had not bothered with the notes before, why start now? With a care that only a mortician had, Viktoria folded the note up and tucked it behind a fold the shirt she had worn to work. She made a mental note to place it with the others before heading of towards the freezer room to retrieve the body she was studying.
Puppy to Asami
Gallagher is Nursy~
Broken Muse is my girlfriend
And Ducky is awesome!
Quote:
That is the general nature of things! An equality, a mutal need!
What? To kill and be killed? To love and to feed? That is what you support! There is no equality between the pet and the master.
-Elizabeth & Jason (From The Thirteenth Season)
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Posted 01-03-201204:43 AM
